im going in for an interview tomorrow and i need to know if this colum sounds good. i was told to write about high sugar granola bars (like nature valley ones) vs. candy bars. heres a sample of what ive got, let me know if its good!

the greatest trick the high sugar granola makers pulled was making their candy bars look like granola bars. they take something that looks healthy and they load it up with so much sugar that it is as bad for you as candy bars. now everyone that buys them thinks they are eating healthy, when they are really getting damaged by calories. the candybar makers should be sanctioned.

but the problem is the granola bars are seemingly healthy and they taste so good. they have a distinct texture. you bite down and they put up a fight. but then after a second they crumble under your force, like so many empires, into landslides of sugary crunch. then you taste the slight spice that leaves a firey upsale aftertaste. i ask you, how can candy bars beat that?

Changing all of the "granollas" to granola, the proper spelling, would be a good start if you were going to hand this paper in. Knowing how to spell your subject matter will help.

"Granola"

EDIT: mbreon beat me to it.

Some capital letters may help as well.

best. first. post. ever.

huh, interview for what? :?

i fixed the error. and ill add that my editor usually fixes spelling and capitalizing errors.

Hey, you got your original screenname back. Congrats.

LOL ty. I missed it dearly. I was getting real sick of being an advertisement for FTP.

Hopefully it isn't with my son's school board for the
vacant "english teacher" positon...

Who do you write for? Granola World Magazine???

OP, what is the interview for?

That's what I'm saying. If its for a newspaper or mag or something I would have more research, who cares what your opinion is?